Thursday, March 29, 2012

Place Entry #6

It’s about a ten minute walk, or a five minute run, from my house to the park bench. Some days the houses I walk past are empty, other days they teem with life. Today I passed a man on his cell phone, pacing in quick bursts across his driveway.

“No baby, it’s not like that…. Come on, don’t be an ass…. I told you…. Look sugar cakes, you can’t believe everything you hear.”

My first question is who in the world would go out with a guy who called her an ass and sugar cakes. My second thought is that he cheated on his girlfriend and she got wind of it. He isn’t doing a very good job of oiling his way out of his mess. I didn’t stay to see the end result.

I’m jogging today, trying to outrun the massive storm boiling in from the southwest. I’m running toward it, casting a wary eye upward, gauging how long I can stay out at my bench before I need to beeline it back home. It’s a rather odd feeling. The sun is shining brilliantly in a mostly clear sky. The early tendrils of white clouds haven’t reached the sun just yet. I’m in shorts and sunglasses but I perhaps should have brought an umbrella. The outer reaches of the storm cloud just took over the sun. I slide my shades up to the top of my head.

A few brave women are scurrying along the path, walking happy dogs. All of them are walking briskly away from the storm, their usually relaxed paces quickened. They all, knowingly or unknowingly cast glances behind them, checking the progress of the clouds.

I probably shouldn’t still be out here, the wind has picked up and the temperature has dropped but for some reason I don’t want to let the storm intimidate me. So, for kicks and giggles I start jogging toward it, playing chicken. It will win of course, but for my brief instant of defiance I felt free. Wouldn’t it be nice if we could see life’s storms brewing on the horizon and have the chance to outrun them as well?
I may have dared the storm a bit too long, if I want to get home before the hail, for that is undoubtedly what these black clouds are carrying, I’m going to have to pick up the pace. The man is gone. Either his ex-girlfriend hung up on him or he’s continuing his pleading inside thanks to the storm.

Tulips and daffodils and crocus and hyacinth don't even acknowledge my presence as I sprint past them. The sky is inky black now but I’m almost home. I put on a last burst of speed. Just as I step onto my covered front porch, the sky booms and lets loose a torrent of hail. The white balls bounce harmlessly a few feet away.

I smile.

I beat you.

6 comments:

  1. Jana,
    I love the mix of storms that you've included in this post! Stormy relationships, storm clouds...nice!
    I noticed too, that only women came out to be in that approaching weather... I agree with your idea about how great it would be if only we could see our life's storms coming...a meteorologist of the future.
    Tulips, daffodil, crocus and hyacinth...sounds like spring to me! I'm not home now, but when I last checked, it was snowing hard.

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  2. Hi Jana--

    Great pacing and vivid language in this piece! It definitely felt stormy! I liked the end--taunting the storm makes me feel like you almost have a competitive kinship with it. Very nice post!

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  3. Jana,

    Cute ending. I could imagine this entry being part of a larger body of work. I notice two kinds of conflict here: interpersonal, between douchebag and his girlfriend, and sort of imagined, between you and and the storm. Lots of opportunities for comparison and commentary.

    -- Steve W.

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  4. Jana,

    I like the fact that you can still get your humorous side into these blogs. "Playing chicken" provides a real sense of fun. It reminds me of how rain really only has a perception of being annoying. Once it hits, it seems as if most of us realize it isn't all that bad.
    More so, I am impressed how you managed to evoke both the coming storm and the fading daylight. I love those moments - when a storm is just in the offing.
    Good work, and I am glad you didn't slug that guy. I can see you scrapping with him.

    Peace,
    Dan

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  5. As Marsha said, your pacing is great here! Your writing shows your action of running to beat the storm. You begin slowly with that odd conversation, but by the time you get back to your house, you give one last burst of speed just as the skies open. I also like how playful this post is. The idea of competing with nature is scary, in a way, because it's so large and unstoppable. Yet, you're teasing this great force. I really enjoyed this post. :-)

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  6. Such an interesting source of tension here, almost as if it's between you and nature itself.

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